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4400 fic: In Every Way 2/10 T

Title: In Every Way
Author: Purpleyin

Rating: T
Spoilers: All Season 2
Summary: Ten Marco/Diana drabbles based around the five senses. Half from Diana's POV, half from Marco's.

A/N: Betaread by Fanwoman.

Diana POV

Drive (Touch)

He never touches her unless she shows him somehow that he can or that it's needed. A skim of her shoulder to reassure, the hug in the parking lot as comfort, he never takes risks with it. It's always purposeful. Sometimes, she wishes he would reach out and make a connection, but she knows why he doesn't. He's afraid of inappropriateness, of driving her away. She knows what's really happening is she's slowly driving him away, unless she touches him, grounds them together, reaffirms that she doesn't want him to go away, unlike the impression her words often convey. He knows better than to think she honestly wants him gone, but neither does he come closer without reason.

She simply isn't used to such reticence, and she's clearly not the only one who has issues with intimacy. One day, she'll find out why he's so careful, who made him so hesitant that he can't yet break through the barrier that's between them. Once she does, she'll make sure he knows he doesn't have to be afraid. At some point, one of them is going to have to stop this - her resistance to moving forward, his hesitation to push any boundaries. She tells herself it's just temporary. When the time is right, she'll make the move he can’t bring himself to chance.


Chapter 1 - Chapter 3


Mar. 24th, 2006 05:02 pm (UTC)
a very charming drabble
charming drabble.

though, to be honest, it seemed like you were jumping from one POV in one paragraph to the other POV in the second paragraph. mind you, that doesn't detract from my enjoyment of it....in fact, it heightens it, as it demonstrates how their feelings are mutually-felt by the two of them.

I hope that made some sense.

have nice days.
Mar. 24th, 2006 05:23 pm (UTC)
Re: a very charming drabble
Eek! It's not meant to sound like two pov's. I've changed it so it perhaps reads less like that. It's meant to mean that she knows he knows better than that, but writing that would sound very odd, so...

Hopefully it makes sense still, as that's how she feels about it all/percieves it, but Marco's drabble to Touch is a rather different perspective on why he's the way he is with her.
Mar. 24th, 2006 05:28 pm (UTC)
Re: a very charming drabble
...and once again, my grasp of English fails me; many apologies, my friend. 'POV' was a poor choice of words on my part...it was more Omniscient(sp) Viewer.

*reads the revised form* still very charming, and now in one POV.

I cannot apologize enough for my not being clear earlier.

have nice days, my friend.
Mar. 24th, 2006 05:34 pm (UTC)
Re: a very charming drabble
No, it was my fault. When I reread it I saw what you meant, it was a poor choice of when to place a new paragraph, one I completely missed when editing.
Mar. 24th, 2006 05:55 pm (UTC)
Re: a very charming drabble
as difficult as this is for me to say, you're not perfect.
(you come close, though)

we all make mistakes.

but I hope you have a nice day anyway.
Mar. 24th, 2006 07:21 pm (UTC)
Re: a very charming drabble
Have another drabble today, to make up for it. :)

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